Friday, March 20, 2015

OC-SibRiv: Brother as Personal Trainer For Self-Hate (haiku) (7-7-12)

Torrents of disdain
blow his sister lost to a
squirm-dance universe.



Oooo, short and not so sweet. Terrific, actually. But if I may hazard a guess, sis ain't lost. Maybe bro is, but sis is navigatin' the cosmos just fine these days.
"squirm-dance universe" Now that paints a picture.
Begs for a sequel in which brother gets some blowback.
Libby, sister won!!!! Thank you for sharing.
Next, the make-up haiku~

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